Eliminate Distractions: You are an excellent writer, and you have great potential. You just need to eliminate the "distractions" (typos, grammar and punctuation errors) so your reader can concentrate on your message. I have faith in you!
Quick adjective tip: If your list of adjectives can go in a different order, and you can maintain the same meaning, put a comma between the adjectives (like "rainy, cold day"). If the adjectives need to stay in an exact order to make sense, don't put a comma between them (like "tiny glass bottle").
ASSIGNMENTS:
Strong American Realism Assignment: This is a fantastic paragraph. Your organization is sound, your quotes are seamlessly integrated, and you make your point. I look forward to seeing what you write next.
Weak American Realism Assignment: You use good examples in this piece and show why they demonstrate one particular principle of realism. To earn full credit on future assignments, make sure to honor length requirements (this piece needed to be a paragraph long) and use MLA formatting in your work. I look forward to reading what you write next.
Dash Rule: When you want to use a dash--because you're making a side comment--you click on the hyphen key (-) two times and do not put a space before you type the next word. Then, you've made a dash--and it looks terrific.
Feedback on major essays: I appreciated reading your insights in this [first or second] major essay for class. I scored your essay based on content, organization, language, and source integration. Here is how your work scored in each category:
Content:
Organization:
Language:
Source Integration:
And here is some feedback after reading this piece and your other work:
Feedback embedded in essay:
I really enjoyed reading this piece. Please review my feedback on
the attached document. I placed the rubric at the end of the essay. Best
of luck to you in your future writing endeavors!
Sincerely,
Sister Bowen
or. . .
Way to put in so much time and effort to make this essay as strong as
possible. Please review the attached teacher document to see my feedback
on your essay and your score on the rubric on the last page of your
essay. I hope my feedback helps you as you move forward as a writer. You
make a compelling, thought-provoking argument!
Librarian:
You can work with a BYU-I librarian to find sources. If you go to the
main library home page, you click on "Subject librarians" and then pick
the librarian you think can best help you. Then, the librarian can work
with you via email to find terrific sources.
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